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Ben: Just a few small suggestions for the fifth season: Can we vary the word choice of “In the lush green forests, species are born,” which you’ve now used three times? Can we say “The sharp teeth and claws we needn’t grow,” to make it clearer? Are we reasonably sure that tool use came before language? Can we choose a slightly different word than “commodity,” which sounds too much like economics jargon? (I really love the “freely available to all learning children” part.)

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